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2017年关于考研英语写作之小作文讲解
小作文是考研英语写作中比较容易拿分,甚至拿高分的部分。可是由于小作文需要注意的地方比较多,加上考场上紧张、焦急,很多小伙伴会在这个地方出现不该有的失误。现在,文都英语老师将以一篇学生写的小作文为例,现场传授在小作文部分勇夺高分的“秘籍”。我们先看下下面的范文。
范文:
Dear Li Ming
I am writing this mail is to congratulate on yours admitted to a university and put forward suggestion regarding the preparation for university life. The detailed information is listed as the following.
At the top of the list , the university is one of the most important parts of our life ,you may have a wonderful life in it. Another point I would like to draw your attention is that inthe campus , you may have much free time , you should take good advantage of it. In addition , there are many excellent people in the university ,you should be modest in it .
I am looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. And I am greatly grateful for your time and attention.
Truely yours
Zhang Wei
点评:
本篇作文的作者在每段开头首行缩进4个字符,这点做的很不错,但还是存在一些问题:
⑴格式错误
①Dear Li Ming这个称呼后面应该加逗号;
②yours后面也要加逗号。
⑵语法错误
①第一段第一句话中有两个谓语动词am writing和is;on是介词,后面应该接动名词,所以应该是admitting,但此处是“被录取”,应该用被动。这句话应该改为:I am writing this mail to congratulate you on your being admitted into a university;
②从第二段看,提出的建议不止一个,而suggestion可数,所以应该用suggestions;
③详细内容如下,The detailed information is listed as follows和The detailed information is listed as the following都可以,只不过the following一般做前置定语,前面一个句子是常用的表达,后面一个句子用的较少;
④“在我们的生活中大学是最重要的部分之一”应该是in our life. Another point I would like to draw your attention is……I would like to draw your attention做后置定语,但这里要注意:虽然draw attention to是固定搭配,但这个to加不加都行。第二段的内容还行,但是论述不够充分,应适当拓展;
⑤最后要注意的是Truly yours的书写,尤其是“Truly”的书写;
⑶优化建议
①表示“第一、第二、第三”的连词:
To begin with, furthernore,/what is more, Last but not least
In the first place In the second place At last
②在第二段里面,建议提出一个观点之后用一句话阐述。如果字数太多,可以只用2个观点;如果字数偏少,则可以提出三个观点,再略作阐述。
③表示“重要”的词:crucial, fundamental, essential
文都英语老师认为,这篇文章总的来说没有大的问题,都是细节性的。但是格式方面的问题是最基本的问题,也是最不该出错的,平时要多注意。须知“细节决定成败”,认真才能成功!
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